RE: Fiction: Epiphany (Epifanía) [EN/ES]
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A sentimental piece that takes us on the inner journey of a man coming to terms with the loss of his mother. The story has a great setting that is enhanced by the little moments like this one,
I hung up the phone and immediately went to get ready to leave for work. Out of my clothes came a small photo, black and white, it was my mother as a young woman, so beautiful and with that warm look that made me shudder. I felt guilty for not having spent more time with her and not being very aware of her life.
This has a very nostalgic feel. Black and white photos are a technology that faded with time, and this resonates well with the story.
The one tricky situation is explaining why he had this vision to begin with.
At that instant, I fell fast asleep.
If my interpretation is correct, it appears to imply that "it was all a dream." If this is the case, then I would recommend avoiding it because it has been overused in English fiction.
I enjoyed reading this story because it touches the heart strings and we can readily identify with the protagonist as he juggles many emotions. Well done!
Thank you for stopping by and leaving such a great comment, I feel honored to receive such an in-depth analysis of my story.
It really wasn't a dream, I took it as a vision. Luis found relief from his pain in the apparition. In the end I emphasize that it was not a dream when the children heard their mother's voice.
A hugs friend.
This is a good point. The visit then is a real spiritual vision, and this is a better resolution to the story. 👍