Overcoming Jennifer | 26 April 2024, @mariannewest's Freewrite Writing Prompt Day 2354 | Prompt: lack of concentration (falta de concentración)

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Goosebumps formed on nine-year old Jeremy's arms. Shivering, he sat straight in the cold office chair avoiding his mother's somber expression. Perhaps it was her grip on his hand that caused his pulse to beat faster. He stared at various objects; a calendar. playful mural; and equipment that doctors had previously used to examine him. He was familiar with this office. But he tried his best not to return too often. A quick opening of the door interrupted his thoughts.

"Hello. What's the reason for your visit today?" The soft, but stern voice directed at Jeremy was ignored.

Instead of immediately answering, he turned toward the opposite wall and stared silently as though he'd just received a lengthy punishment.

"When riding his bicycle, Jeremy continues on at the same speed and doesn't slow down when approaching an obstacle. Other times, he just fails to stop," his mother, Mrs. Morrison, answered.

Dr. Schaffer prompted. "Jeremy, is there a reason why you don't stop? I need you to describe as best you can when and what happens when this occurs."

Jeremy thought for a long moment. His loss of vision didn't occur only when riding his bike. He hadn't been truthful with his parents. Flashes of light. Headaches. Words disappearing from the page. Letters not coming into focus. Number three being the number eight. Forgetting important tasks.

Jeremy hung his head as he sat quiet.

"Jeremy Morrison! Answer the doctor immediately, and don't leave anything out. The doctor is here to help you." The harsh tone of his mother's voice spelled upset.

He didn't understand the strange feeling at that moment. But something stirred inside his head that prompted him to tell all that had been happening the past few months.

Dr. Schaffer listened intently as Mrs. Morrison studied his face. He didn't divulge any answers she was searching for.

Instead, Dr. Schaffer calmly replied, "Jeremy, you may have to miss a few days from class. Nothing too important going on in elementary school except your education, right?" His attempt to solicit a smile and response from Jeremy failed.

Slowly Jeremy raised his head, then blurted, "our semester dance. So, I don't want to look different from other boys. None of my friends wear eyeglasses!" he hissed. "I refuse. It's probably as my older sister said from my lack of concentration."

Dr. Schaffer glanced at Mrs. Morrison. "I understand how you feel about eyeglasses, Jeremy. However, we don't know whether they are required yet. First, we'll do some tests." He continued, "and of course, x-rays to see what's going on inside that head of yours."

X-rays. Jeremy didn't understand why an x-ray was needed or what it would tell the doctor. He hoped it didn't reveal his thoughts.

The last thing he wanted was to wear eyeglasses. I refuse to be laughed at behind my back. A "nerd" is what they will call me. As an afterthought, he reared back as though a ghost had appeared. Oh My God! What will Jennifer think?

Panic set in as he remembered flashes of a conversation he overheard. There was Jennifer giggling with an odd expression on her face. Mimicking was the word for what she was doing. And her friends were laughing as she placed both hands in a round ball to her face. The image resembled large binoculars.

For six months, he had done everything he could to get her attention. It was difficult enough when he finally did manage to win her over with his charm and knowledge of guinea pigs.

How could she even look at me? A popular girl attracted to a "Nerd". And one with large, bulky eyeglasses. He frowned and shook off the thought. I guess I'll just have to pretend not to be smart, he reasoned.

Jeremy's mother jerked him back to the doctor's office as she grasped his hand. "You mean it may not be his vision? The words were slow to escape.

"In some cases, loss of vision may be a sign of something else happening within the body." he replied, intentionally omitting mention of the brain. No cause for unnecessary alarm until we run tests.

Mrs. Morrison's heart sank at the doctor's words. She clutched her purse. A sickening feeling encased in a thousand questions rose in the pit of her stomach.

Meanwhile, Jeremy relaxed his shoulders. He felt relieved he may not have to wear glasses. So focused on his not having to wear glasses and its effect on Jennifer that he didn't leave room to dwell on the other part of Dr. Schaffer's statement.

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For my theme, I was inspired by and utilized the @daily.prompt's publishing of 26 April 2024, @mariannewest's Freewrite Writing Prompt Day 2354: lack of concentration.

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! [Overcoming Jennifer Spanish Translation]

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A Jeremy, de nueve años, se le puso la piel de gallina en los brazos. Temblando, se sentó derecho en la fría silla del despacho evitando la expresión sombría de su madre. Tal vez fue el apretón de su mano lo que aceleró su pulso. Se quedó mirando varios objetos: un calendario, un mural juguetón y el equipo que los médicos habían utilizado antes para examinarle. Aquel despacho le resultaba familiar. Pero se esforzaba por no volver demasiado a menudo. Una rápida apertura de la puerta interrumpió sus pensamientos.

«Hola. ¿Cuál es el motivo de tu visita de hoy?» La voz suave pero severa dirigida a Jeremy fue ignorada.

En lugar de responder inmediatamente, se volvió hacia la pared opuesta y se quedó mirando en silencio como si acabara de recibir un largo castigo.

«Cuando va en bicicleta, Jeremy sigue a la misma velocidad y no reduce la marcha cuando se acerca a un obstáculo. Otras veces, simplemente no se detiene", responde su madre, la señora Morrison.

El Dr. Schaffer le preguntó. "Jeremy, ¿hay alguna razón por la que no te detengas? Necesito que describas lo mejor que puedas cuándo y qué ocurre cuando esto ocurre «.

Jeremy pensó durante un largo momento. Su pérdida de visión no ocurría sólo cuando montaba en bicicleta. No había sido sincero con sus padres. Destellos de luz. Dolores de cabeza. Palabras que desaparecían de la página. Letras desenfocadas. El número tres es el número ocho. Olvidar tareas importantes.

Jeremy agachó la cabeza mientras se sentaba en silencio.

«¡Jeremy Morrison! Responde al doctor inmediatamente, y no te dejes nada. El doctor está aquí para ayudarte». El tono áspero de la voz de su madre deletreaba enfado.

Él no entendía la extraña sensación en ese momento. Pero algo se agitó dentro de su cabeza que le impulsó a contar todo lo que había estado ocurriendo los últimos meses.

El Dr. Schaffer escuchó atentamente mientras la Sra. Morrison estudiaba su rostro. Él no divulgó ninguna de las respuestas que ella buscaba.

En su lugar, el Dr. Schaffer respondió con calma: «Jeremy, es posible que tengas que faltar unos días a clase. No pasa nada demasiado importante en primaria excepto tu educación, ¿verdad?». Su intento de solicitar una sonrisa y una respuesta de Jeremy fracasó.

Lentamente, Jeremy levantó la cabeza y soltó: «nuestro baile semestral». Así que no quiero parecer diferente a los demás chicos. Ninguno de mis amigos lleva gafas", siseó. «Me niego. Será como dijo mi hermana mayor por mi falta de concentración».

El Dr. Schaffer miró a la Sra. Morrison. "Entiendo lo que piensas de las gafas, Jeremy. Sin embargo, aún no sabemos si son necesarias. Primero haremos algunas pruebas«, continuó, “y por supuesto, radiografías para ver qué pasa dentro de esa cabeza tuya«”.

Radiografías. Jeremy no entendía por qué era necesaria una radiografía ni qué le diría al médico. Esperaba que no revelara sus pensamientos.

Lo último que quería era llevar gafas. Me niego a que se rían de mí a mis espaldas. Un «empollón» es como me llamarán. Como una ocurrencia tardía, se echó hacia atrás como si hubiera aparecido un fantasma. ¡Dios mío! ¿Qué pensará Jennifer?

El pánico se apoderó de él al recordar flashes de una conversación que escuchó por casualidad. Allí estaba Jennifer riéndose con una extraña expresión en su rostro. Imitando era la palabra para lo que estaba haciendo. Y sus amigos se reían mientras ella colocaba ambas manos en una bola redonda hacia su cara. La imagen se asemejaba a unos grandes prismáticos.

Durante seis meses, había hecho todo lo posible por llamar su atención. Fue bastante difícil cuando por fin consiguió conquistarla con su encanto y sus conocimientos sobre cobayas.

¿Cómo podía siquiera mirarme? Una chica popular atraída por un «empollón». Y con unas gafas grandes y aparatosas. Frunció el ceño y se sacudió el pensamiento. Supongo que tendré que fingir que no soy listo, razonó.

La madre de Jeremy lo empujó de vuelta a la consulta del médico mientras le agarraba la mano. «¿Quieres decir que puede que no sea su visión? Las palabras tardaron en escapar.

"En algunos casos, la pérdida de visión puede ser señal de que algo más ocurre dentro del cuerpo », respondió, omitiendo intencionadamente la mención al cerebro. No hay motivo para alarmarse innecesariamente hasta que hagamos pruebas.

A la señora Morrison se le encogió el corazón al oír las palabras del médico. Aferró su bolso. En la boca del estómago se le agolpó una sensación nauseabunda envuelta en mil preguntas.

Mientras tanto, Jeremy relajó los hombros. Se sentía aliviado por no tener que llevar gafas. Tan concentrado estaba en que no tendría que llevar gafas y en su efecto sobre Jennifer que no dejó espacio para detenerse en la otra parte de la declaración del Dr. Schaffer.

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Para mi tema, me inspiré y utilicé la publicación de @daily.prompt de 26 April 2024, @mariannewest's Freewrite Writing Prompt Day 2354: lack of concentration.

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What a delightful tale!
You bring us so deep into the mind of this little boy that we see his thoughts, his fears and the things he can't say out loud. I do hope it isn't any more than bad vision.🥰

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Hello @jhymi. Thanks so much for taking time to visit and view my story. Yes, budding romance interests of elementary school boys can be so delightful. At least, he's observant in finding out what his love interest, Jennifer, likes. And boys wearing eyeglasses, don't even approach her.

I feel my story tells of the world youngsters see as it relates to themselves. It's an innocence to be preserved, for too soon the outward world will descend upon them. I too hope the tests don't reveal any devastating medical condition causing his temporary blindness.

I appreciate your kind compliment for my story. Thanks for your support. Take care.

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You have a wonderful day yourself. That's a fine young man you created.🥰

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I understand nerdy Jeremy's vulnerability because I don't like hospitals till tomorrow! 😄 His feelings for Jennifer is sweet. I hope if he must wear glasses, Jennifer will be kind to him now that they are friends. Hopefully the tests show the real trouble and he gets the right treatment.

Your story draws attention to self-perception and what society expects of us and these things start from a very early age. Knowing how to handle this will make a happy person. Sadly, we often don't know how until we are older and have been through harsh experiences. A fine and though-provoking story! Thanks for sharing and have a wonderful day. !PIMP

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Hello @kemmyb. Thanks so much for taking the time to stop by and view my story. Yes, I beileve you are correct in self-perception starts at an early age, especially in this era where social media makes youngsters aware of appearances and social norms. Youngsters can be self-absorbed. They see and project from only what matters in their own space and the small world round them. They don't yet understand the big picture. I too hope the tests don't reveal any serious medical condition.

I appreciate your engagement and support. Take care.

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